Looks like I was able to find another mangaka that uses pencils for his manga.
I've read your manga up to the last page you uploaded, and I have to admit, a very clever story you got going on here. Dialogue is nice and readable and the grammar is acceptable (no confusion whatsoever). The organization is certainly well done. THOUGH I had to go back from one page to another here and there making sure I'm reading it in the correct order. And the use of basics is quite noticeable.
The only thing I suggest (and this is only my opinion. No need to take it if you don't want to) is provide links in the descriptions on and for each page. And I would advise you to do this as soon as possible before it becomes too hectic to do so (trust me, I know).
Also, you are actually the FIRST deviant-manga artist I've seen yet that uses the point-perspective method. You don't know how many traditional mangakas I've seen that don't use that method for their scenery/backgrounds. BUT I've noticed that you don't use it for ALL your panels (why is that, out of curiosity? no need to answer if you don't want to). I would highly advise to use it throughout. Once so, your manga would definitely look a lot more....how should I say it...not nicer since it's already nice-looking but...more proportionally-correct, I guess(?).
And finally, your anatomy is decent. Can use a bit more work (sorry if that sounded too harsh UNLESS this is a style you're aiming then PLEASE ignore this part of the comment) but it's decent.
Overall, nice manga, great dialogue, easy to follow, and clean. Keep working on it!!!!!!!!
And while I'm at it, here's a
! Enjoy...